Attention your attention
Has completely forgotten me
Don’t want your pity have no intention
Of playing your games – attention
Your attention has been stolen away from
Me – don’t feel obligated to check up on
Me when you so easily admit…you forgot
All about me – lucidly I do see
All the things passing by that you used
To want from me with me – not emptily
You easily forgot it was attention that I need
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lovely word play,
wow,
u r doing a unbeatable job!
🙂
Thanks Jingle!!!
U know the rule,
thus u know what to do,
have fun!
Happy Thursday!
Way to go!
🙂
yes I’m on it I’ll let you know when I’m done (of course) can’t wait to check out some new folks and re-visit my veteran friends!
Loved your word play, attention at its best..
–Someone Is Special–
Thank u very much I appreciate ur comment!
You certainly have drawn my attention…
Lovely words, strong emotions- it is just so nice..
Simply written across poem expressing much stronger sentiments.. I love such ones.. I can so relate to it- the emotion conveyed, and your style of writing.. glad I came across..
Thanks Olivia! I truly appreciate your support and comments!
Nice play with the words!
Pamela
thanks! appreciate ur giving me a read!
ah, Ms. Peaches, your word play is amazing. certainly got my attention 🙂
Thank u so much I appreciate ur stopping by!!!
Love, love, love how you play with words in this poem. Amazing job!
awe thank u so much! I appreciate ur stopping by and giving me a read!
i like the flow of your words! Thank you for sharing 🙂
Thank u so much!!! I appreciate the time u took to stop by!
Loved how you put this together…awesome xx
thanks butter cup!
very good, you should put it to music
I may have to give that a try!!! thanks for the suggestion!
This should caught the attention of the person intended to. Lovely word play! Have a wonderful weekend.
I guess we’ll see if the attention has been captured by the person intended 🙂 thanks for giving me a read I appreciate your support!
Lovely! I do like the flow of your poems. I hope you’re getting all the attention you deserve!
🙂 thank u so much!!!
Slick and pointed, I enjoyed the barbed feast of words immensely, thanks!
thank u so much!!! i appreciate ur comment!
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Thanks Jingle I’ll pass along! (Late in replying but I’m on it)
Congratulations……….
Lovely Weekend
xoxoxox
Best Wishes
Olivia
thank u and I hope u had a lovely weekend as well!
cool poem 🙂
thanks!
compelling x
thank u I appreciate ur stopping by!!!
Nicely spun! I like it …
very much obliged! appreciate ur giving me a read!
Love this, Ms Peaches, you’d really get the attention from the intended with this poem.
Happy Rally 🙂
we’ll see if I do LOL thanks for checking out my share!
Like your use of words 🙂
JP
Thanks JP!
Fantastic job.
Thanks
Thank u so very much!
Just letting people know I have moved to http://www.jessicasjapes.com
Thanks for letting me know you moved!!!
What a great play of words, rythmn and rhyme. Well done, Ms. Peaches!
Victoria
Thank you Vitoria I really appreciate your readership and support!
Love Love Love the title. Always love the blending of your lines. Each thought blending into another. Each feeling tying into the next building up the next emotion so much more. It was a great read hun!
Thank you so much!!!!
the first requirement of any relationship is attention- you said it so beautifully.
Thanks Trisha!
very interestingly written piece.. 🙂 enjoyed it thoroughly..!!
Thank you I’m glad you enjoyed it!
Yeah, I can feel it! I have two awards for you Ms. Peaches. If you’d like to accept, you can find them here: http://frayedges.wordpress.com/2010/09/06/blogger-awards/
Thank you I definitely would like to accept!!! you are so kind!!! sorry to be so late in picking up the awards! I’m getting caught up though~
There’s a natural rhythm to this poem that I love. Also love the structuring. Well done!
Hi!
Came by to visit again for Rally #28. Will check back tomorrow!
Happy days … 🙂
Lovely words–beautifully written
Woah – powerful stuff! A friend of mine was saying the same thing the other day that she didn’t want birthday presents from her daughter and grandchildren. All she wanted was some TIME. I’m going to show her your poem because in the voice of a younger generation, you have written what was in her heart, and she is in her seventies. You’re good – you write with passion and all the emotions that flow out of your fingers as well as your heart.
Wow u having given me such a wonderful comment than u so much I’m glad u enjoyed and thank u so much for stopping by.